Friday, July 15, 2011

Flash Fiction Blogfest Part Two

Today I am doing my first blog hop! (See previous post for details.) Thirty other bloggers are hopping with me! That means I am posting a short piece of fiction here and then visiting the blogs of all the other people joining the fest and reading what they've written. I'm excited to see the variety of ways people responded to the same theme. I feel like I'm a six year old and it's the night before my birthday party. I can't wait to get a flavor for all the new bloggers I'll meet during this exchange of creativity and encouragement. 


Visit the blog links below to read more of the entries.


My piece:


     Fourth of July had come again – Kenny’s favorite holiday. We all gathered on the sloping driveway for fireworks, finding the familiar spot where the cement was level enough.
     
     I  imagined I could see the black marks left from last year’s snakes and the powdery residue from the multi-colored fountains. Kenny had spent hours planning that display. Mom’s voice broke through my thoughts.

     “Before we light the fireworks I have some news to share. The public defender called to say Kenny is coming home next week. He’s done; time served.”

     I heard none of her words after that. The relief began in my chest and moved down to my stomach as nine months of clenching let go. I looked up and saw a streak of silver light shooting into the air, taking my grief with it, transforming it, and sending it to the ground in a shower of gold. 

     As a whistler shot through the silence, I started to laugh. This news meant he was safe and would get another chance. He would be free. Our little show seemed to last for hours, bringing the best message of freedom I had known in my fifteen years. 

     Mom lit the last of the Roman candles and repeaters. The bursts of light came to end, and in the dark, quiet aftermath I found myself hoping Kenny would be strong enough to hang on to his freedom, smart enough to stay out of trouble.

     “We still have sparklers,” Mom reminded us. I lit mine and wrote the word PLEASE in the sky.  



                                                 Lacie Myers July 15, 2011


16 comments:

  1. Wow! This was great! What happened to get Kenney in trouble? And that last image of someone writing please is so poignant.

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  2. I love that last night - "writing please in the sky." Love the emotion throughout.

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  3. "I looked up and saw a streak of silver light shooting into the air, taking my grief with it, transforming it, and sending it to the ground in a shower of gold."

    Such beautiful imagery! Loved this line!!

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  4. I love fireworks and I love how you described them as well. Good job Lacie!

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  5. This is great imagery. You've done a wonderful job. LOVE IT!! And I'm a follower now. YAY!

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  6. This was very powerful for me. I have a son who has struggled a lot. Awesome description, Lacie.

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  7. I really liked your story and how you told it. It hits home. This is news a friend of mine would love to hear (her brother is behind bars). Thank you for sharing it.

    The Write Soil

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  8. That was awesome! You brought back so many memories with your descriptions of the snake residue and such. Beautifully done. And I love the message! I would read this book. 250 words and I'm hooked.

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  9. Beautiful imagery! Details like the black marks left from last year’s snakes and the powdery residue from the multi-colored fountains. brought the story to life.
    Great job!

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  10. Loved it. Her hope for freedom for Kenny. Nice.

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  11. I also liked the detail of looking for the marks from last years fireworks. Takes me way back.

    Thanks for visiting and following my blog.

    Building Castles on the Beach

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  12. That is so sweet! Great imagery - both with the burnt fireworks and writing please in the sky. I used to do things like that with sparklers. It was such a nice touch.

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  13. Nice - I liked the little details you were able to convey with few words.

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  14. You Are Awesome ! It's see you blossom.

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  15. Can I just say "Wow"? This is amazing! And I love your imagery! I wish there was more!!

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